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Im not taking it the wrong way i love hearing feedback frim you guys it makes me a better writer
Im not taking it the wrong way i love hearing feedback frim you guys it makes me a better writer
Welcome, and again please don't take that the wrong way, I loved it :) I just wanted to help out a little...
Umm dint take this the wrong way, I lived the storyline, like how you had the plan going ant things...I just think you rushed it a bit too much....it felt too rushed, like there was no relax moments, all of them were sooo intense....I feel like, if you were to add some relaxed parts that build up suspicion, maybe you wouldn't have gotten bored?
7/3/13