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Louis love?

Car ride

Katie pov:
It was so quiet so i decided to turn on the radio. "OMG THIS MY SONG!!" I said when i heard it. The song is call good girl by Carrie Underwood. Yes i know its weird but i LOVE country music so.. I stared singing along "his lips are drippin honey but sting you like a bee" the traffic light suddenly turned red..... I SLAMMED ON BRAKES! My seatbelt held me close to the seat the light turned green and i pressed the gas.
*5 minutes later*
i pulled up to louis and lizzy's flat there was nowere to park in the drive way so i just parked in the street. I went up and knocked on their door.
"Katie what took you so long?" They both asked in unison. " Oh nothing just traffic." We sat there in silence for a while... Then i suggested we should go ahead and leave so we wont be late. On the way there it was silent but all i could think about is how much i liked Louis and how hot he looked today... I was snaped out of my trance by louis picking me up. "Louis put me down" i screamed. All he did was chuckle. The i soon joinded with my giggleing because he was tickleing me. He carried me inside the movies and we got our tickets. I looked at the tickets. They looked weird then i relized that he had got us tickets for BAD TEACHER.
Why would he get us tickets for this movie?!?! I thought to myself. Oh well, i dont care im just glad im with louis then lizzy coughed awkwardly and i hopped off louis's back. We walked into the movie and took our seats.

Comments

Oh okay lol whew! Im not used to giving feedback but I was told in order to be a good writer not only do I need to accept feedback but I need to give feedback lol
@Chanel_Needs_1D
Im not taking it the wrong way i love hearing feedback frim you guys it makes me a better writer
Makayla_horan Makayla_horan
7/3/13
Welcome, and again please don't take that the wrong way, I loved it :) I just wanted to help out a little...
@Chanel_Needs_1D
Thanks and ill try to better with my new story!
Makayla_horan Makayla_horan
7/3/13
Umm dint take this the wrong way, I lived the storyline, like how you had the plan going ant things...I just think you rushed it a bit too much....it felt too rushed, like there was no relax moments, all of them were sooo intense....I feel like, if you were to add some relaxed parts that build up suspicion, maybe you wouldn't have gotten bored?