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Where We First Met
Where First We Met
Author: Livvy
Rate: 5
Your English, and grammar overall, is actually really good so don’t sell yourself short. You have a good dialogue to detail ratio, but I feel like the detail should be a little more descriptive.
As for your story, there isn’t too much to say about it yet. It’s too early to tell where you are taking the story, what the plot is exactly, and whether it’ll be good or not. I think you have a good start for good story, though. It is a little bit fast for my liking, so maybe try to slow it down a little bit. You just have explanation after explanation and more drama coming in right after drama happens. Just slow it down a little and try to put some fillers in there to put a little space between the different things going on.
Overall, I think you need to slow it down just a little. I may not know what you’re story is trying to fully convey just yet, but you don’t have to rush just to get the band in the story. Take your time to make sure you get in all of the details at a moderate pace. That’s why I’m giving you a 5 as it stands right now.
If you find your review to be disappointing, I cannot honestly tell you that I’m sorry. Do not let what I say in any way discourage you from writing or anything for that matter. I am just one person with strongly opinionated views on everything. If I made it clear that I strongly dislike your story, do not think that other people won’t enjoy it. There are many other readers with different views than me who will find interest in your story where I may not have. I hope you do take something out of this and improve on and continue your writing, but if you don’t, that’s fine too.
Author: Livvy
Rate: 5
Your English, and grammar overall, is actually really good so don’t sell yourself short. You have a good dialogue to detail ratio, but I feel like the detail should be a little more descriptive.
As for your story, there isn’t too much to say about it yet. It’s too early to tell where you are taking the story, what the plot is exactly, and whether it’ll be good or not. I think you have a good start for good story, though. It is a little bit fast for my liking, so maybe try to slow it down a little bit. You just have explanation after explanation and more drama coming in right after drama happens. Just slow it down a little and try to put some fillers in there to put a little space between the different things going on.
Overall, I think you need to slow it down just a little. I may not know what you’re story is trying to fully convey just yet, but you don’t have to rush just to get the band in the story. Take your time to make sure you get in all of the details at a moderate pace. That’s why I’m giving you a 5 as it stands right now.
If you find your review to be disappointing, I cannot honestly tell you that I’m sorry. Do not let what I say in any way discourage you from writing or anything for that matter. I am just one person with strongly opinionated views on everything. If I made it clear that I strongly dislike your story, do not think that other people won’t enjoy it. There are many other readers with different views than me who will find interest in your story where I may not have. I hope you do take something out of this and improve on and continue your writing, but if you don’t, that’s fine too.
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Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.
It's in my knowledge that this author isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.
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12/31/16