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I’m Birdie
(4) I didn’t particularly like the summary/first chapter. (See Chapter 14). Honestly, I thought I could keep reading after your summary and the first chapter, but then she met the boys and all of a sudden Harry’s in love with her regardless of his relationship with Kendall. Slow the fuck down! People don’t just automatically fall in love with other people. I mean, it’s possible, but it’s not very realistic or smart because they barely just met.
The spelling was great, but the punctuation could use a little more work, especially for dialogue. You could use more description. A lot of what you wrote is: she did this; she did that. There was absolutely no description, and I feel like your story can use it. The chapters were a bit short for my liking
Also: how the hell is Louis going to Uni and being in One Direction at the same time? I don’t even think this is remotely possible with how much work he puts into One Direction and how much work he would have to do for Uni.
Overall, I didn’t really like it, mostly because of the pace. Slow down – a lot.
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12/31/16