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Katelynn is phantastic Review!
Katelynn is phantastic
Will it ever be ok??
Grade: 3.5
Good things:
-If you had an original idea I feel like you could write a really good story.
Things to work on:
-You should rewrite your summary. It's one of the first things the reader looks at to see if they're interested in the story, and yours is a little on the short side. You also shouldn't make it seem like the character is talking to the reader unless the story is told from 2nd person point of view.
-You should give your story a quick edit. There are some capitalization errors, quotation errors, etc. Let me know if you need help, I'd be happy to!
-Try to make your sentences a little longer and not so short and choppy. The story should flow when you read it.
-Try to come up with a creative idea for your story! This idea is kind of overused.
Would I recommend this story to someone else? No sorry :/
slow hands by dainey
6/24/17