Fanfiction 101
Pour Toujours
Pour Toujours
Author: warmachinerox1
Rate: 9
Can I just start with the fact that I’m already subscribed to this story? (Is that even allowed?) Honestly, I’m one of those silent readers who will read but won’t comment most of the time because (a) I stink at compliments and (b) I have a love/hate relationship with social interaction. However, even though I am subscribed already (have been since the first post), I do have a few notes for you.
First, in the summary (the chapter) you wrote “splitting image” but the phrase is actually “spitting image”. I know it isn’t that big of a deal, but it kind of bugged me. Other than that, there are a few places where you had weird paragraphs, like there would be one word of the sentence in one paragraph, and then the sentence would continue in the start of a new paragraph. I caught that at least once. And also, every time, and I mean every time, a different person speaks, you need to start a new paragraph – even if it’s just to say a small sentence.
That’s honestly it really. You had a great dialogue to detail ratio, and the detail was amazing. I honestly really love this story line. It’s just so original, like, I’ve never read anything like it before, and I can’t wait to continue reading it!
If you find your review to be disappointing, I cannot honestly tell you that I’m sorry. Do not let what I say in any way discourage you from writing or anything for that matter. I am just one person with strongly opinionated views on everything. If I made it clear that I strongly dislike your story, do not think that other people won’t enjoy it. There are many other readers with different views than me who will find interest in your story where I may not have. I hope you do take something out of this and improve on and continue your writing, but if you don’t, that’s fine too.
Author: warmachinerox1
Rate: 9
Can I just start with the fact that I’m already subscribed to this story? (Is that even allowed?) Honestly, I’m one of those silent readers who will read but won’t comment most of the time because (a) I stink at compliments and (b) I have a love/hate relationship with social interaction. However, even though I am subscribed already (have been since the first post), I do have a few notes for you.
First, in the summary (the chapter) you wrote “splitting image” but the phrase is actually “spitting image”. I know it isn’t that big of a deal, but it kind of bugged me. Other than that, there are a few places where you had weird paragraphs, like there would be one word of the sentence in one paragraph, and then the sentence would continue in the start of a new paragraph. I caught that at least once. And also, every time, and I mean every time, a different person speaks, you need to start a new paragraph – even if it’s just to say a small sentence.
That’s honestly it really. You had a great dialogue to detail ratio, and the detail was amazing. I honestly really love this story line. It’s just so original, like, I’ve never read anything like it before, and I can’t wait to continue reading it!
If you find your review to be disappointing, I cannot honestly tell you that I’m sorry. Do not let what I say in any way discourage you from writing or anything for that matter. I am just one person with strongly opinionated views on everything. If I made it clear that I strongly dislike your story, do not think that other people won’t enjoy it. There are many other readers with different views than me who will find interest in your story where I may not have. I hope you do take something out of this and improve on and continue your writing, but if you don’t, that’s fine too.
@That_clifford_girl
Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.
It's in my knowledge that this author isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.
All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)
12/31/16