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I’m From One Direction Damn It!
I’m From One Direction Damn It!
Author: bananabreeana
Rate: 7
First and foremost, your title, although intriguing, contains an interrupter (‘Damn It!’). So instead of I’m From One Direction Damn It!, it should be I’m From One Direction, Damn It! Notice the comma? If you read the two over a few times, you can kind of see the difference and why you need the comma there.
Your grammar was good, not too many mistakes, but none that I caught that were consistent enough to correct. There was, however, a lot of dialogue compared to detail. Everything was mostly just people speaking without a lot of those details, even actions or phrases of what’s just going on in general – at least not in depth anyway. Towards the last few chapters, though, it did get better, and you had a good dialogue to detail ratio even though you could be more vivid.
Either way, I think the story was amazing. It is one of the first books, in a while, that I’ve read all the way through. The plot is just so original, and I love how everything fits together with the whole curse and everything – definitely one of the most original stories I’ve read.
I did feel that some parts went a little too fast, because it was just like boom, boom, boom, boom (if you get what I’m trying to say). I do think there were parts where the boys were being a little irrational with June, especially telling her that they didn’t need her, but it really fit their characters for this story.
Overall, I really enjoyed reading this story, and with that ending, I will be reading the sequel because I’m really interested to know what happens next.
If you find your review to be disappointing, I cannot honestly tell you that I’m sorry. Do not let what I say in any way discourage you from writing or anything for that matter. I am just one person with strongly opinionated views on everything. If I made it clear that I strongly dislike your story, do not think that other people won’t enjoy it. There are many other readers with different views than me who will find interest in your story where I may not have. I hope you do take something out of this and improve on and continue your writing, but if you don’t, that’s fine too.
Author: bananabreeana
Rate: 7
First and foremost, your title, although intriguing, contains an interrupter (‘Damn It!’). So instead of I’m From One Direction Damn It!, it should be I’m From One Direction, Damn It! Notice the comma? If you read the two over a few times, you can kind of see the difference and why you need the comma there.
Your grammar was good, not too many mistakes, but none that I caught that were consistent enough to correct. There was, however, a lot of dialogue compared to detail. Everything was mostly just people speaking without a lot of those details, even actions or phrases of what’s just going on in general – at least not in depth anyway. Towards the last few chapters, though, it did get better, and you had a good dialogue to detail ratio even though you could be more vivid.
Either way, I think the story was amazing. It is one of the first books, in a while, that I’ve read all the way through. The plot is just so original, and I love how everything fits together with the whole curse and everything – definitely one of the most original stories I’ve read.
I did feel that some parts went a little too fast, because it was just like boom, boom, boom, boom (if you get what I’m trying to say). I do think there were parts where the boys were being a little irrational with June, especially telling her that they didn’t need her, but it really fit their characters for this story.
Overall, I really enjoyed reading this story, and with that ending, I will be reading the sequel because I’m really interested to know what happens next.
If you find your review to be disappointing, I cannot honestly tell you that I’m sorry. Do not let what I say in any way discourage you from writing or anything for that matter. I am just one person with strongly opinionated views on everything. If I made it clear that I strongly dislike your story, do not think that other people won’t enjoy it. There are many other readers with different views than me who will find interest in your story where I may not have. I hope you do take something out of this and improve on and continue your writing, but if you don’t, that’s fine too.
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12/31/16