Visiting Hours
Author: Zaynlove
Rate: 9

So you had your summary, and then you had a chapter with the summary, which makes no sense because you can just edit the summary itself without having to make a whole chapter for it…

Anyway, your grammar, per usual, was great, but there were a few errors I did catch – nothing you can’t fix. I do think, though, that this story moved just little too fast in the beginning. There were some gaps that must have occurred because I’m reading but feel like I’m missing out on some major information.

I know this is completely irrelevant and childish of me, but oh my gosh, power rangers are life and the thought Harry playing with a tiny Zayn with power ranger action figures just warms that hole where my heart should be. <3

After you write “…” you need to hit that spacebar because you have a lot of ellipses (the proper term for “…”), but you don’t have any spaces (it’s just proper grammar).

What. The. Fuck. You can’t just kill him off when you left the chapter off on such an okay note! You have to understand that I write these reviews as I read, so when you killed him off all of this other stuff I’ve written doesn’t even matter anymore. I mean, it does, but seriously: what. the. fuck.

And now this is what I get for not reading all the way through because he didn’t die. I really hate when you think that’s what is really happening but it turns out to be a freaking dream. I applaud you though. You seriously had me for a moment there even though the order would make no sense that way. Damn you.

Okay, I really, really, really like this story. For one, it’s not a love story between a girl and a boy (or a bromance gone serious), which is like rare. I seriously doubt there are any stories like this, but there need to be more similar – but not too similar – to it because it’s amazing. Second, little Zayn and fuck-up Harry trying to get better just makes the icy abyss where a heart usually is melt.

I seriously think that even though there are quite a handful of minor grammar errors that everyone needs to read this story.

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If you found this review to be disappointing, I'm can't say I'm sorry. As I said, I am a brutally honest person, or so people tell me. If you would like me to take this down, I will, just ask me. Don't bitch about it either; I don't care what you think, I'm just telling you what I think. Don't get mad, you asked for it. Don't rate this badly just because you don't like what I say. But on the off chance you like what I'm telling you, I'm glad you could learn something from me.

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