Fanfiction 101
Am I More Than Just Your Babysitter?
(1) Completely unrealistic. One Direction: internationally famous boy band consisting of 19-22 year olds. They act like fucking 3 year olds in your story, yet they pretty much sing about sex in their songs.
Then, Simon hires this girl to be their “babysitter”. They are men who need a babysitter – not likely. The fact that Simon doesn’t even do a background check, job interview, or anything to make sure she is qualified to even be their babysitter is highly unlikely.
Be more realistic. Work on a few more details. Use less dialogue. Overall, I didn’t like it.
If you found this review to be disappointing, I'm can't say I'm sorry. As I said, I am a brutally honest person, or so people tell me. If you would like me to take this down, I will, just ask me. Don't bitch about it either; I don't care what you think, I'm just telling you what I think. Don't get mad, you asked for it. Don't rate this badly just because you don't like what I say. But on the off chance you like what I'm telling you, I'm glad you could learn something from me.
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12/31/16