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A New Beginning

(6) I'm not really sure what you were trying to say in your comment, so I'll write up a review then try to answer what you've said in that comment. So I'm kind of sick of when the main girl breaks up with her boyfriend to start off the story, then ends up going out with one of the guys. It's just so overdone. I think the events of the story just happened a little too fast. If I were the main girl, I would've stayed away from relationships for a while before jumping back into that kind of lifestyle.

I'm not really getting the picture of what direction your story is going. It's unclear of what the story really is about other than the fact that it's a love story. There always has to be a main plot upon all of the little complications that happen. Otherwise, you just have… some kind of a boring diary that goes too fast and skips a lot of their life.

Before I get to your comment, I just want to note that you need to work on your grammar skills just a little more. There aren't too many mistakes, but it's still poor here and there.

Now, your comment said that you "don't know what to next" and "if you have any suggestions PLEASE let me know". I'm not really sure what you want me to suggest at this point because I have no idea where your story is going. Clarify what you want to happen, or just do the big thing that you were talking about already. Not all great stories last forever.

If you find your review to be disappointing, I cannot honestly tell you that I’m sorry. Do not let what I say in any way discourage you from writing or anything for that matter. I am just one person with strongly opinionated views on everything. If I made it clear that I strongly dislike your story, do not think that other people won’t enjoy it. There are many other readers with different views than me who will find interest in your story where I may not have. I hope you do take something out of this and improve on and continue your writing, but if you don’t, that’s fine too.

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Comments

@That_clifford_girl

Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

It's in my knowledge that this author isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

InValid @ 5SecondsOfSummerFanfiction.com
12/31/16

@InsomniaCam

Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

It's in my knowledge that this author isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

InValid @ 5SecondsOfSummerFanfiction.com
12/31/16

@Steffi_Hemmings00

Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

It's in my knowledge that this author isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

InValid @ 5SecondsOfSummerFanfiction.com
12/31/16

@BEEbeautiful

Hi! I don't usually do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

It's in my knowledge that thus author isn't coming back. Which means your revuew isn't coming. But! I recently started a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form.

InValid @ 5SecondsOfSummerFanfiction.com
12/31/16

@ItsKirstyCaniff

Hi! I don't nomally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

It's in my knowledge tht this authr isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

InValid @ 5SecondsOfSummerFanfiction.com
12/31/16

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