Fanfiction 101
Becoming Harry Styles
(8) Love, love, love this story. Your plot line is mostly unique, which is what I love about it. You don’t rush, and you’re very thorough in your writing. I’d say the only reason I didn’t give you a ten out of ten is because I’ve read a lot of Marcel stories. This one, however, is by far the best one. Also, the introduction docks off a star in my book as well. You asked if it would make sense without it. To be honest, I think there's a strong chance that if you take it out, it will make sense. You'd just have to give information as the story goes along. Ex: if he sees Riley, then you describe who she is. Don't just tell me before I even meet the character. Otherwise, I really liked it.
If you find your review to be disappointing, I cannot honestly tell you that I’m sorry. Do not let what I say in any way discourage you from writing or anything for that matter. I am just one person with strongly opinionated views on everything. If I made it clear that I strongly dislike your story, do not think that other people won’t enjoy it. There are many other readers with different views than me who will find interest in your story where I may not have. I hope you do take something out of this and improve on and continue your writing, but if you don’t, that’s fine too.
@That_clifford_girl
Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.
It's in my knowledge that this author isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.
All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)
12/31/16