Fanfiction 101
Secret Love
(6) Considering you've just started your story and it is your first one, I can't say it's that bad. You have little to no spelling and punctuation errors, but you should really start a new paragraph each time a different person speaks. Also consider making your chapters a LOT longer.
On the other hand, the character traits you gave the main character are common. She's anorexic, she cuts... So many stories use this kind of character in their story and it's a serious matter to be writing about. The plot line itself isn't as overdone, but I've seen it before. The best friend cheats on the other best friend with the boyfriend. I'm a big fan of unique story lines. As a reader, I want to read something that hasn't been done before, but keep on going, you have a great start.
If you find your review to be disappointing, I cannot honestly tell you that I’m sorry. Do not let what I say in any way discourage you from writing or anything for that matter. I am just one person with strongly opinionated views on everything. If I made it clear that I strongly dislike your story, do not think that other people won’t enjoy it. There are many other readers with different views than me who will find interest in your story where I may not have. I hope you do take something out of this and improve on and continue your writing, but if you don’t, that’s fine too.
@That_clifford_girl
Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.
It's in my knowledge that this author isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.
All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)
12/31/16