What happens When I Meet Him! - Comments, page 2

@Kiyah_Malik
happy late birthday

Your chapters need to be a lot longer like kiyah_malik said, I'm sorry but it's just not good

@styles 4ever
ur wlcm and my b-day is today!!! and did i sound like a pro back there cuz if so I make mistakes to i mean nobodys perf rite??

@Nagai-Chan
thanks. atleast i am now getting more information about my story

@Kiyah_Malik
thanks alot. i will work on the chapters and povs. i am trying for a co athor.

Suspenseful. I don't think you have to change a thing. It's quite funny to read.

No offence but this story is very confusing, you don't have alot of details, your rating is a 2.0, your chapters are short, and I don't understand it. I'm not trynna be mean but I personally don't like this story. Maybe if you got an editor or something, or co-author than yeah. But if this is your first fanfic you need alot of work. If this is your first fanfic than I love the idea but I don't like the story itself. You should make the chapters longer and add more detail, and stop switching POV's so much, since the chapters are short anyways you should stick to 1 POV at a time. Just some helpful advice :) you don't have to listen if you don't wanna but i'm jus sayin......

@Nagai-Chan
thanks i wanted something new in the story

Funny, that chapter 10. Breaking news! Classic.

@Lovelylogann
thanks!

@styles 4ever
oh cool:) i think ur doing a woderful job so far though! u should keep doin it love:) xx

no one said anything, so i have to continue on intill someone does or atleast co write with me!


@Lovelylogann

ya i agree that this story is like 17 again:) i love that movie! i also think the first part reminded me kinda like the movie 13 going on 30:) u said u were giving the story to someone, yeah? like a contest or something? have u done that already??

thanks!

@styles 4ever

This is getting cooler!

@Nagai-Chan
thanks. i was waiting for ever for a comment and yourwelcome!

Hi! I really like the plot of this story! It's sort of like the movie: 17 Again, and it's really great. Also, you commented on my story, saying good luck, I really want to say Thank you! It's really nice of you. Great story!