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Secrets With My Step Brother**UNDER EXTREME EDITING!** - Comments, page 2
I agree with Loveit. Everyone needs a little criticism. I hate when people act like that. She's only trying to help.
@briannalovesniall.
A little critism is good, it shows and helps on what you should improve on. I was not telling you how to write your story but just saying it is a little hard to understand. that's all no need to get mad at me.
@Loveit
tbh...i hate when people try to offend my story and tell me how i should write MY story. No offense though.
Could you try if please don't take a offense try when they talk do this.
"hi" said bob rolling his eyes.
" Sorry did I bother you" said Kiki looking concerned into his eyes.
i mean it shows who is talking and it's easier to understand. I'm a scholar writer at my school.
just trying to help love. But your story has a great p.o.v of being pregnant and how rough iy can be.
YOUR STORY IS FIRST ON THE POPULAR PAGE! But I have no idea how long, but the last time I looked at the popular page, it wasn't there. :P BUT UTS ON THE POPIYLAR PAGE! :D
I love this story!!
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