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Asylum
Grade: 5
Good Things:
-The AHS gifs give me life haha.
-It's hard to tell because there aren't very many chapters, but it sounds like it would be an interesting story, I have read a couple stories with similar plots, however. Make sure you add something to your story in the future to set it apart from some of the other stories.
Things to Work On:
-Your story could use some editing. Just small mistakes like this can really make someone not want to read your story. If you don't know how to fix it, I could edit it for you. Just let me know :)
-It was kind of confusing who's point of view the story was being told from, and it was hard to keep up with all the characters
-Maybe try to make the chapters a bit longer.
Would I recommend this story to someone else? Hard to say because there aren't very many chapters.
Asylum
Grade: 5
Good Things:
-The AHS gifs give me life haha.
-It's hard to tell because there aren't very many chapters, but it sounds like it would be an interesting story, I have read a couple stories with similar plots, however. Make sure you add something to your story in the future to set it apart from some of the other stories.
Things to Work On:
-Your story could use some editing. Just small mistakes like this can really make someone not want to read your story. If you don't know how to fix it, I could edit it for you. Just let me know :)
-It was kind of confusing who's point of view the story was being told from, and it was hard to keep up with all the characters
-Maybe try to make the chapters a bit longer.
Would I recommend this story to someone else? Hard to say because there aren't very many chapters.
Notes
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6/24/17