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Kasydee Moss Review!
Kasydee Moss
No Good
Grade: 6 (it's hard to say because you only have two chapters, but it seemed pretty good)
Good things:
-It's hard to say because I don't know where the story is going, but as of right now I would say it doesn't seem too similar to any other stories I've seen. It's interesting though :)
Things to work on:
-I would strongly suggest making a summary. It doesn't have to be too long. A paragraph or two is plenty. The summary grabs the reader's attention and makes them want to read your story.
-In the first chapter you refer to the mother in the third person but then switch to second person, and back to third person. It doesn't really matter which one you pick, but pick one and stick to it throughout the chapter.
Would I recommend this to someone else? Get a few more chapters up and then maybe :)
No Good
Grade: 6 (it's hard to say because you only have two chapters, but it seemed pretty good)
Good things:
-It's hard to say because I don't know where the story is going, but as of right now I would say it doesn't seem too similar to any other stories I've seen. It's interesting though :)
Things to work on:
-I would strongly suggest making a summary. It doesn't have to be too long. A paragraph or two is plenty. The summary grabs the reader's attention and makes them want to read your story.
-In the first chapter you refer to the mother in the third person but then switch to second person, and back to third person. It doesn't really matter which one you pick, but pick one and stick to it throughout the chapter.
Would I recommend this to someone else? Get a few more chapters up and then maybe :)
Notes
hi :)
check out my new fanfic por favor :P
slow hands by dainey
6/24/17