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"His or Mine?" Review
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His or Mine?
Grade: 5.5
The good things:
-Discription. Seriously I felt like I was physically in your living room when you described it in the first chapter.
-The relationship between the characters just lifts my spirits.
Things to work on:
-I feel like this is another one of those stories where one of the boys is best friends with a girl, they start dating, he goes to a club, cheats on her, they break up, then they make up, get married, and have twins. I hope that’s not what happens but it seems like that as of right now. So I’m warning you. DO NOT DO THE THINGS MENTIONED ABOVE. I mean sure they can get married, but every. freaking. story. has the part where they go to a club and one of the boys cheats on her. It really is just so over-used. Again I’m not saying that that’s what you were planning to do the whole time, I’m just telling you, if you were….Don’t.
-It didn’t really draw me towards the story. There wasn’t anything about your story that was….compelling at first glance. Try making your summary POP.
Would I recommend this story to someone else?: Honestly Idk. It seems kind of mainstream if you know what I mean. Probably not lol
His or Mine?
Grade: 5.5
The good things:
-Discription. Seriously I felt like I was physically in your living room when you described it in the first chapter.
-The relationship between the characters just lifts my spirits.
Things to work on:
-I feel like this is another one of those stories where one of the boys is best friends with a girl, they start dating, he goes to a club, cheats on her, they break up, then they make up, get married, and have twins. I hope that’s not what happens but it seems like that as of right now. So I’m warning you. DO NOT DO THE THINGS MENTIONED ABOVE. I mean sure they can get married, but every. freaking. story. has the part where they go to a club and one of the boys cheats on her. It really is just so over-used. Again I’m not saying that that’s what you were planning to do the whole time, I’m just telling you, if you were….Don’t.
-It didn’t really draw me towards the story. There wasn’t anything about your story that was….compelling at first glance. Try making your summary POP.
Would I recommend this story to someone else?: Honestly Idk. It seems kind of mainstream if you know what I mean. Probably not lol
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