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"His or Mine?" Review

Missesonedirection94

His or Mine?

Grade: 5.5

The good things:

-Discription. Seriously I felt like I was physically in your living room when you described it in the first chapter.

-The relationship between the characters just lifts my spirits.

Things to work on:

-I feel like this is another one of those stories where one of the boys is best friends with a girl, they start dating, he goes to a club, cheats on her, they break up, then they make up, get married, and have twins. I hope that’s not what happens but it seems like that as of right now. So I’m warning you. DO NOT DO THE THINGS MENTIONED ABOVE. I mean sure they can get married, but every. freaking. story. has the part where they go to a club and one of the boys cheats on her. It really is just so over-used. Again I’m not saying that that’s what you were planning to do the whole time, I’m just telling you, if you were….Don’t.

-It didn’t really draw me towards the story. There wasn’t anything about your story that was….compelling at first glance. Try making your summary POP.

Would I recommend this story to someone else?: Honestly Idk. It seems kind of mainstream if you know what I mean. Probably not lol

Notes

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Comments

omg my story is the first on the list ahhhh :3

@JordynHoran
Cool Thanks

@BEEbeautiful
I'll remove it when I get the chance :)

@PUNK_CALUM
wow thanks for asking for someone to review my story I was actually looking for one and I saw my name at the bottom of the list and was like woah

but your name is attached and it looks like your a coauthor and it kinda bugs me don't mean to sound rude tho

Can u review a story called save me by @BEEbeautiful