Fanfiction Reviews!

Hiya guys, this is my first EVER fanfiction review, so do not be surprised if it is not that good. And, I would just like to add, this fanfiction series is not made to hurt the feelings of the authors(of the fanfictions) but to help them to improve, or to realize they do not need to, their fanfictions.

The fanfiction in question is called parenting, a surprisingly disappointing story which first seemed a great idea but turned out to be a fanfiction full of little to no detail, a story that is incredibly short and had an stupid story line.
The story started out pretty good, promising heart ache with one of the main characters Louis saying if how he has no chance, barely has a chance of conceiving a child, and if how he and his girlfriend and he had broke up.
But than the story started to go rapidly down hill, well, after Eleanor and Louis broke up. The reason why they broke up? Because Louis was unable to/ had little chance of being able to make babies, which would seem reasonable to some standard if Eleanor had not of gotten upset about if it was HER not being able to have children and Louis had not if surrported her through that.
And than we hear the story of Alison, which also could of been a great story IF, and yes the if is the most important word in this sentence, the author had gone into more detail on her story, and because she did not she risked the story of Alison being stupid because it was so rushed. So, basically, Alison has the day from hell, which is probably an understatement and finds her bf making out with another women, and then she walked home and got raped by a drunk druggie(but how she knows that he's a drunk and a druggie I do not know) and than found out she was pregnant, with the rapists baby. The author completely understated what happened to Alison, and did not really show how she felt about the whole situation, though I do understand that it was quiet an original idea and I lend her a hand on that.

Than Louis tells his manager, Simon, about this idea he has and Simon tells him to make a presentation about it and show to the boys, which admittedly sounded quiet interesting.
Ok, the story did not go completely down hill after what happened earlier, because what happened (or what was said to Alison's aunt) was pretty interesting and was defiantly going to stir p some tension in the story, Alison's aunt's insurance does not cover her, Alison and Alison's baby! Now that was interesting, and I think this is where the author can save the story.
But the next chapter kind of let me down, because Louis says that he wanted to have a child and wanted to find all of the pregnant fans at concerts, and get them to sign a form and than he will go around each of the houses of the pregnant girls and than pick a girl for Louis to help grow their baby.
Ok, so guys, sorry if I kind of slated the story but I would actually recommend the story to any one, especially since what happened to Alison, though its a bit predictable, sorry to the author but it actually dud turn out pretty well 1 subscription from me.

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C xx