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(3) I understand in your comment that you have a bit of bad spelling -it wasn't too bad- and that your chapters were short, but what does using flutter have to do with anything? I use the word flutter in my stories; there's nothing against it...

As for you overall story line and characters, I felt that it started out a bit rushed. The first thing that happened was her finding out her best friend slept with her boyfriend; there's no excitement in that. But jumping off a bridge immediately following? Now, that's weird. Then after like two days her "best friend" comes back and she forgives her. What the fuck? If one of my best friends sleeps with my boyfriend, I'd be like, "Bitch, no. You wanna sleep with my boyfriend, fine, but don't fucking think that apologizing makes a difference. Oh, you were drunk, that's not my problem. You shouldn't have gotten drunk in the first place."

Then, the detective aka her brother, allows her to go with some strangers they just met. Pa-lease, why the fuck would he do that. And the whole Tamara and Harry back story? That was rushed too, and if that asshole (not directly Harry, but if a guy in relation to the situation) took my virginity and never called my back after going on not one, but 8 dates with me, I wouldn't forgive his sorry ass. If he really loved her, he would've called.

So yeah... Those are my thoughts. I have to say, the middle was kind of okay though, not that I can remember much of it now...

If you find your review to be disappointing, I cannot honestly tell you that I’m sorry. Do not let what I say in any way discourage you from writing or anything for that matter. I am just one person with strongly opinionated views on everything. If I made it clear that I strongly dislike your story, do not think that other people won’t enjoy it. There are many other readers with different views than me who will find interest in your story where I may not have. I hope you do take something out of this and improve on and continue your writing, but if you don’t, that’s fine too.

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@That_clifford_girl

Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

It's in my knowledge that this author isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

InValid @ 5SecondsOfSummerFanfiction.com
12/31/16

@InsomniaCam

Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

It's in my knowledge that this author isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

InValid @ 5SecondsOfSummerFanfiction.com
12/31/16

@Steffi_Hemmings00

Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

It's in my knowledge that this author isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

InValid @ 5SecondsOfSummerFanfiction.com
12/31/16

@BEEbeautiful

Hi! I don't usually do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

It's in my knowledge that thus author isn't coming back. Which means your revuew isn't coming. But! I recently started a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form.

InValid @ 5SecondsOfSummerFanfiction.com
12/31/16

@ItsKirstyCaniff

Hi! I don't nomally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

It's in my knowledge tht this authr isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

InValid @ 5SecondsOfSummerFanfiction.com
12/31/16

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