Eight Years Gone - Comments

Please please pretty please write more

@skipper
I appreciate your criticism, but it is just a fan fiction for fun. It's not meant to be published or honored by some kind of god. Okay? It's just a silly story I felt like writing.
When I write about serious things, then I do my research and take my to write it, but this is just a silly story to write because I want to.
Again, I appreciate your criticism, but please know that it's nothing more than a story. It's not scientific proof or whatever.
Thanks.

I think this is an interesting idea, but I find your interpretation of it inplausable. If she had been in a coma for eight years, her mind would not have matured. She would still be an eight year old. After that long in a coma, the brain tends to move backwards, not forwards. She would have intensive physical, occupational, speech therapy. She would have to relearn how to walk, talk, and she wouldn't be thinking about whether or not the boy was attractive.

It would also be nearly impossible for her to remember the exact events immediately prior to her being thrown into the river and falling into the coma. Even you try to avoid that, she would spend much time in the hospital after waking, she wouldn't be completely fine unless she was a child of God or something.

I understand you were trying to go for something different, but I think you lost the realism in this one. Make sure you research your topics, and follow through with your ideas.

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@WolfGirl96
Thank you! And I shall update eventually :D

I really like this story so far. It is a very interesting idea and I can't wait to see where it goes. Update soon?

@RuthlessAccidents
Alright, I fixed it! But thanks, like, I don't know if I would have ever notice dthat if you hadn't of said anything. xD

@AlexisNicole822
It's alright, love. I understand. It's no problem at all.

@RuthlessAccidents
That is a COMPLETE accident! I'll fix it right away! I guess when I copy and pasted, it took away my punctuation. -.- thanks for noticing that!

I really like the plotline so far and the whole thing has already got me intrigued, but I do find the lack of punctiation troubling. It's a bit hard to tell when a person is talking and who is talking. I really do like it so far, though.