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@hazzahstyles19
sorry its my first chapter damn it i realy didnt want to r do the chapters because it will be totaly different and sorry again i dont realy know alot about punctuation sorry about the liam thing i will fix that im just going to start over completly sorry i feel bad about this i am so sorry :'(
Okay… Cupcake… Right off the bat, I found it kinda hard to follow along because of a few things.
a) After you end a sentence, you are suppose to capitalize the first letter of the next word. This will let the readers know that the sentence before is over and it's easier to follow along.
b) Please please start using the proper punctuation marks like comma's and apostrophes ( I think I spelt that right…) It will help the viewer read fluently and the way it was meant to be read.
c) Paragraphs are needed. Once you get done with one five sentenced thought, a new paragraph would be used to separate it all so it won't get jumbled up and crazy.
d) Quotation marks are good. They are your friend. They help tell whether or not one of the characters are talking. For example:
"Mom said to take out the garbage." Amy informed her older brother as he walked towards the kitchen.
"Yeah, whatever." He growled, rolling his eyes.
You see how that separates and helps the reader see who is talking and what they are saying?
Spelling is also something I see that could use a little work. I'm not trying to be mean but there are a lot of spelling errors in there. I can understand if your typing on a tablet or a phone but they have spell check, right?
I didn't write this to make you angry or upset with me. I'm trying to help you. I hope I didn't upset you and I would love to read the re-do of the first chapter, if you do one. I hope you take this in a good way.
-M xx
@Megan Tiffany Styles
:)
6/4/14